tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post7221269188045214398..comments2023-06-12T00:18:02.637-07:00Comments on The Modern Progressive: Writing in the Modern AgeSolomonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08703347400306083814noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-41350025933318342922011-03-01T17:22:36.966-08:002011-03-01T17:22:36.966-08:00Hey Solomon,
Great information!!! It must have ta...Hey Solomon, <br />Great information!!! It must have taken a bunch of research. <br /><br />I would recommend that you try to draw more conclusions from the all those amazing facts... and then that would help you make a really strong point (thesis). <br /><br />Also, you repeated "How many emails have you received in the last six months?" a few times, and your sentence "About the quality of the writing." is a fragment. All fixable. :)<br /><br />Good job!StargirlMrazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01276547004849372468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-21733014475394110122011-03-01T10:37:34.670-08:002011-03-01T10:37:34.670-08:00I agree with wintrborn about the personal touch pa...I agree with wintrborn about the personal touch part about it, I also enjoyed the historical facts you inserted. I do this too but I noticed you typed the same word in right after another just thought I'd point it out over all I definetly enjoyed this article.The Painternoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-70319626715576890382011-02-27T20:40:28.249-08:002011-02-27T20:40:28.249-08:00I agree with what both of them said but i also wan...I agree with what both of them said but i also wanted to add that i think you could make it better by making it more personal like your personal writing experience instead of just about Facebook but over all i liked it :)Huck Healershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12306498816476804371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-69479450604277936302011-02-27T19:09:13.101-08:002011-02-27T19:09:13.101-08:00Charlotte - Let's try and remember "to&qu...Charlotte - Let's try and remember "to" vs. "too," hmmm?PinonKnitterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14113895653080351359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-13258000919178642282011-02-27T18:49:12.905-08:002011-02-27T18:49:12.905-08:00Hi Solomon, I agree with my mom about the organiz...Hi Solomon, I agree with my mom about the organization, and to many questions, maybe cut it down to just one or two questions, and organize your ideas into a few more paragraphs instead of the two blocks. To hard on the eyes:) Otherwise, it was really cool.Charlotte Van Houtenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10158245232840595349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3809664449363914806.post-77571223183867409502011-02-27T17:58:54.018-08:002011-02-27T17:58:54.018-08:00Hi Solomon, I like your point here about quality v...Hi Solomon, I like your point here about quality vs. quantity. Just because we write a lot, doesn't mean we're necessarily writing well. I would like to see more organization in your post though and a few less questions. An occasional rhetorical question can get your reader thinking, but setting up your statements with 1st a question and then an answer just boosts your word count. :) In class tomorrow we'll discuss how to structure posts and tighten their focus.PinonKnitterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14113895653080351359noreply@blogger.com